Thanks for submitting this piece on homework Adam. It was good to see that you included the 4 paragraphs stating the issue, your opinion, the opposing opinion and a possible solution.
At the beginning of paragraph 2, you wrote ‘ we should give homework’ eventhough your opinion is the opposite. It possibly is better to write ‘ Many people say we should give homework’.
Also for paragraph 4, explain to the reader what it is about.
Thanks for submitting this piece on homework Adam. It was good to see that you included the 4 paragraphs stating the issue, your opinion, the opposing opinion and a possible solution.
At the beginning of paragraph 2, you wrote ‘ we should give homework’ eventhough your opinion is the opposite. It possibly is better to write ‘ Many people say we should give homework’.
Also for paragraph 4, explain to the reader what it is about.