Thanks for submitting this piece for homework Emily. It is a fantastic piece and you have made some great points. It was good to see that you included the 4 paragraphs stating the issue, your opinion, the opposing opinion and a possible solution.
Even though this is your 1st draft try and begin each line with the word in by the margin.
Thanks for submitting this piece for homework Emily. It is a fantastic piece and you have made some great points. It was good to see that you included the 4 paragraphs stating the issue, your opinion, the opposing opinion and a possible solution.
Even though this is your 1st draft try and begin each line with the word in by the margin.